Blue Water Ink
Went for a drive in the mountains looking at possible retirement homes.... thinking of making the name of my poetry website:Blue Water InkA deep water sailor with far away dreams;a lover of flowers...
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Dear Wayne,If you find a spot as happy as your verse, you'll be a lucky man.For me, the joy in this is primarily the meter, the three-beats are magic.Hope you find your eagles in the aspens.Cheers, jgd
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The reader needs a pair of drumsticks when reading this. Very rhythmic. Excellent flow.
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A dandy, Wayne! Makes me want to skip and clap my hands. That would be a great name for a website.jtb
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Wayne...This has a wonderful swaying rhythm. Your imagery paints the scene of a place I'd love to find. We are also looking to the mountains for a home....probably the Blue Ridge Mountains. This scene...
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Thanks jgd...that's the plan!Serpent... .I think it was the early influence of Dr. Suess or Mother Goose (or John Phillip Souza)...John.... I am going to redesign my website anyway... I may as well...
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This is simply beautiful!Jan or you can view my personal poetry webpage at Poems For The Heart and Soul
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Wonderful, Wayne.I enjoyed lying back while drifting along.Couple a wee points...V1 - wrong their? should be there?Your in-sentence capitals could all be small, unless they're names. In this case, all...
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Thanks Jan,Merlin.. .I fixed the CAPS... tthanks for watching out for me... the "their" should be "their" ...at least, that's what my wife says.... I have to live with her... so I can't change it...
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Merlin, the way I read it, it's "the river that belongs to them" not "there is a river" Wayne, is that the intended meaning?Jan or you can view my personal poetry webpage at Poems For The Heart and Soul
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Ok, that works.I had been looking more at the place, and there the river flows.Their river flows there works... it may be open to interp, but is ok.Merlin
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Wayne, when I first read it, I did do a double take over the word "their" to check the meaning in my mind. Perhaps the substitution of "our" would indeed clarify it. Jan or you can view my personal...
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Jan, Merlin,Yes, that was the intent... "their river"... but, I can see it is a bit awkward.I am not sure "our" really works either.An earlier version had:"the closer to be.(period)The river of...
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From the soul of a sailor you write,not from any thoughts of glory--yet,wherever you roamthat you choose to call home,you'll be called their Poet Laureate.Thanks, Wayne (I think). Can't get your last...
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Wayne, I agree with you that the piece becomes more touching if the abstract river is given attachment. It may be that "their" is the best word, except that no one is mentioned anywhere else in the...
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